Talk:普通DISCO (Pǔtōng DISCO)/@comment-35904873-20190512100430

I feel like these lyrics aren't translated well enough to really convey the meaning in the original Chinese lyrics, so I'll throw out some suggestions I have to correct the current ones:

Only a slight grammatical error, but "In this ordinary day" is better conveyed as "On this ordinary day".

Being a little nitpicky, "I walked quite ordinarily" should be "I walk quite ordinarily", in the present tense.

... More grammatical nitpicking, but "Pulling out an ordinary headphone" should be "Pulling out a set of ordinary headphones".

Now a more serious mistranslation; "Find a common feeling" should be "Finding a little bit of that ordinary feeling" -- "普通" in this context isn't common (it holds the connotation of "shared"), but should be ordinary (which holds the connotation of "normal"). 点 also implies "a little bit", but that isn't a big problem.

For "Have one of my favourite ordinary songs", it would be better translated as "Bring on one of my favourite ordinary songs". "来一首" (literally "come one piece [of music]) implies a stronger sense of command, which "bring on" shows better than "have".

"普通的DISCO，我们普通的摇" is literally "Ordinary DISCO, we'll ordinarily sway", so a translation that can better convey the lit. meaning would likely be "At this ordinary DISCO, let's ordinarily sway", as the latter part of the line implies a sense of command too.

In "我普通的灵魂，在普通的出窍" is a reference to "灵魂出窍", a Chinese idiom that means "an out-of-body experience", so I would translate this to "My ordinary soul left me in an ordinary out-of-body experience".

A minor change in the singer's intermission of "后面的朋友们你们好吗？让我看到你们的双手！" ; I'd translate it to "Hey you guys at the back, how are you? Throw your hands up!"

The "鼓点" in "踩着普通的鼓点" means drumbeat, not drums. So, "Stepping with an ordinary drumbeat" is more appropriate. Likewise, "世界随着我旋转" means "The world rotates around me", not "with me".

"跟着普通的节奏，身体普通的抖动； 这普通的一切， 都变得不同" would be translated more appropriately into "Following the ordinary rhythm, body shaking ordinarily / All this normalcy turns different".

"我普通的心 在扑通扑通的跳" would be better translated as "My ordinary heart is frantically, ordinarily beating". "扑通扑通" is the Chinese equivalent of "ba-dum, ba-dum", which conveys that anxiety the singer is feeling to have her heart beat so strongly and quickly.

Lastly, with "在这普通的动次打次之中 冲上云霄", I was confused with the phrase "动次打次" (at least, it seemed to be a phrase . . .). After some looking into, the general consensus is that it represents a drum beat / drumming pattern. One Baidu (Chinese Wikipedia basically :p) user states this:

动——敲击底鼓（Bass Drum）一次 (1x)

次——敲击踩镲（Hi-hat）一次 (1x)

打——敲击军鼓（Snare Drum）一次 (1x)

次——敲击踩镲（Hi-hat）一次 (1x)

So I'll go with it. The line would be better translated into "With these ordinary movements, the drumbeat rushes into the sky".

And that's it. Sorry for the long long comment, just thought I'd try to give some feedback, Chinese being my mother tongue. :p