User blog comment:Amandelen/Translations that need to be checked/@comment-26361605-20200207143908/@comment-38658275-20200213122629

1. Seems to be something like "That small bit of kindness is a second hand formula of someone from somewhere of poor taste being applied while living daily life", put more literally. I think the lines are relates and connected by the の.

2. Looks like it is just listing two possible actions, so it could be getting rewarded or punished, as in sometimes one happens and sometimes the other happens. So yes I think you have the right idea.

3. I read it something like "Frankly spoken blame is taken as taboo and people can get deceived".

4. I think it should be "deliciously burnt" or something that expresses the "food" is cooked and looks appealing. The だったけど part looks like it's connecting the two lines in beteween by showing their hesitation and justification for eating, kinda like "I know we were just friends a moment ago. But...but...if you're so deliciously burnt...nya".

Also, the line "天国も　神様も　運命も　ないんだニャ" should probably be more like "Heaven, and god, and fate don't exist nya".

Overall your changes look fine. Some of the original lines were a bit oddly written so things do read a little more naturally now.