User talk:Endersworld

I think there are several issues with your translation for 夢日記 (Yume Nikki). ElectricRaichu (talk) 10:27, January 11, 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) 三拍子 refers to triple-time in music, like the music in this song. "paused" is a bit strong: what pops up at the window is the music she heard until the day before, but whether it is still going, has paused, or has stopped altogether is not specified.
 * 2) 日々を消す "the day vanishes" isn't wrong, but I would strengthen the nuance that she's shutting out the day by closing her eyes
 * 3) 笑いながら The line is an inversion, i.e., the sentence really is 笑いながら ゆりかごで目を閉じて 日々を消す. Thus I would translate it something like "While smiling in the cradle, I close my eyes to shut out the days."
 * 4) 抜け殻のような日々 Where do you get "torn apart" from? Also, よう can mean "seems" but in this case I would take it as "like": "days that are like an empty shell (or like a husk)".
 * 5) 意味をつづりながら Where do you get "continues to exist" from? It looks like つづる means to compose. ながら here means that the composing is happening at the same time as the music continues (in the next line).
 * 6) 短針と長針が分からぬ  "confusing short and long hands" Just a point of clarity, but your English isn't very clear about why the clock is confusing. My understanding of the Japanese is that you can't distinguish the short and long hands, as borne out by the video.
 * 7) 始まったエンドロール "The end has already begun" I think it means the end credits have started (like in a movie).
 * 8) 記憶を繋げて "so I hold on tightly to my memories" it's open to interpretation but I think it means that the credits connect her to her memories.
 * 9) 明日を掴むように ように refers to manner, appearance or result, not merely doing something at the same time, i.e., you need to choose one of "like I'm grasping tomorrow", "as if I'm grasping tomorrow" or "so that I'll grasp tomorrow".
 * 10) どうしようもないこの世界 "useless world" - maybe "world where I'm helpless"? AFAIK どうしようもない means that there's nothing one can do about an issue rather than there's nothing you can do with something.