User blog comment:Amandelen/Translations that need to be checked/@comment-43481320-20191108200956/@comment-38658275-20191108225656

Looks pretty good.I think it would be fine as it is, but I do have some suggestions if you're interested.

"contemplated" might not be the best way to describe 見つめた in this context. I think it is more referring to the physical act of staring at the sky, not necessarily the thinking/contemplating action going on in someone's head.

"Bearing this happiness" sounds a little negative and I'm not sure if it is meant to be or not. I tend to think of "bearing" something to be a burden or unwanted and I don't get that impression from the song for the happiness.

"That rain colored thing is the reason why I dance so fleetingly", I think で in this case is acting similar to と, as is they are dancing with the thing, not that the thing is the reason for the dancing.