Talk:鬼火 (Onibi)/@comment-32327493-20180519004011

the comment below me already addressed some grammatical issues in damesuke's translations, but i found multiple. sorry if this becomes really long, and I write this with the best intentions! these lines would be better written as "Won't you kill yourself now, won't you kill yourself now?". an imperative phrase isn't really posed as a question in english by itself.

these lines would be better written as "I don't care if I fall into hell / All I hope is that I take you there with me". This just flows better in formal English; the only one I can explain is that "hell" is a broad area, therefore you would not add "the" in front of it. this is minor, but it would be better written as "You feel like you have a crush on me". The term for infatuation is crushing on someone, not crushing with someone. these lines would be better written as "The pain of being torn apart by children to be their toy". it just flows better, and something being torn off usually means one part of a thing is being torn while being torn apart means multiple parts of a thing are being removed (which makes a lot more sense if there are multiple children doing the tearing). "moveless" is incredibly uncommon in english, a better word to use would be "motionless". and once again, i believe that "i am a doll" should just be "doll/the doll". not because it's a wrong translation, but because the person saying that line is not the doll, plain and simple. it's a lore thing, and translations should be accurate to the lore in a series like this. if damesuke is adamant to keep the line as it is i can't stop him, but he should know the line is misleading. that's all! i hope this helps!